Thanks for working so well on this writing Xay. It was a pleasure to see ‘Xay the learner’ at work. I particularly like the amount of description and personal voice you have put in your story to help the reader to understand what you were experiencing – the vibrating seat and the butt warmer. In your next piece of writing try to identify all the sentences and put full stops in. I appreciate you teaching me so much about the Ipad too. Thanks for sharing.
After reading your story with my class, I have decided that we should have a butt warmer on the staff toilet that lives between Room 10 and Room 11!!! It is so cold that I hold on all day until I get home because I just can't face sitting on that freezing frozen frizzling plasticish seat!!!!! Your image that you chose to go with your writing was perfect.
Thanks for working so well on this writing Xay. It was a pleasure to see ‘Xay the learner’ at work. I particularly like the amount of description and personal voice you have put in your story to help the reader to understand what you were experiencing – the vibrating seat and the butt warmer. In your next piece of writing try to identify all the sentences and put full stops in.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate you teaching me so much about the Ipad too.
Thanks for sharing.
Your welcome I enjoy having you in our class and makeing the car...
DeleteGreat story Xay.
ReplyDeleteA butt warmer. Now sometimes that could be handy. perhaps they could add that to bikes!! I enjoyed reading your story!
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your story with my class, I have decided that we should have a butt warmer on the staff toilet that lives between Room 10 and Room 11!!! It is so cold that I hold on all day until I get home because I just can't face sitting on that freezing frozen frizzling plasticish seat!!!!! Your image that you chose to go with your writing was perfect.
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